This peice is so powerful, the questions really add depth. i almost feel like i'm intruding upon your life by reading it... the content is fantastically composed and the flow smooth. the rhyming is very subtle (though questionable at the end "thing" and "same"?) thoughout the peice not interupting flow at all but really holding the peice together. great peice.

5/5

I liked the way the questions kind of lead you into the sadness and the story behind the poem....It really made me think. It was clever using the questions....mimicked some one thoughts....very sad but awesome poem...!!

[lostlaureate - come find me]

Aw this poem is so sad!! it almost made me cry! Great job on it though. It is filled with emotion & the flow on it was good. Great job! 5/5*

Wow this is so touching and makes me wanna cry. great job writing this.

Great poem, touching too

Pretty cool and sweet too

That's so sad. I couldn't imagine life without my dad, and if I didn't have him, I imagine this is what it would feel like. You have a talent for making all your poems seem real.

Again, really sorry :( but you convey your pain very well through your poetry.. nice work

I adore this poem. I love the way you use questions to lead through the poem. The lines

But before you completely shut me out
Please remember this one thing
I have always loved you father

especially stood out to me.
Great writing 5/5 again

Oh god, this made me cry....the pain was so intense...and I can relate to it...again I liked the imagery and wording, and I enjoyed the flow.

This is again another one of your good ones. I think all you need to do to this one is redo this line. "Its the though of you hating me that I can't embrace"
I got confused on the though....it should be thought. And then it would be perfect. 5/5

Very nice poem.. Very deep and meaningful. I think you did a great job writing it and expressing your feelings in it.

Well done!