Woww.. dat wuz amazing! keep up the excellent work! :))
jessy

Mostly your use of diction was good and gave depth to your words. However, in places it caused me to stumble over your words instead.
The fourth stanza was my favourite because it captured a touching image and it flowed off my tongue too.
Good strong ending, the final line gave an emotional conclusion.
Well done.

This poem is really good. I don't even know how to describe it. It was all so perfect. I especially love the way that you ended it. Great job! You described everything so well & you did a really good job on this! 5/5**