I thought this poem was very cute and sweet. Though your ryhmes weren't the best, the meaning really picked up the slack for it. I enjoyed reading your poem very much.

Nice sentiment but you used pain and variations of the word too much.

Your poems are so inspiring i wish i was that good.
great poem one of my favorites
Sam Mayo

Hey Yaz,

Well I hadn't read this one before and I agree pain and different variations of pain were used alot but repetition give emphasis.. allows the reader to see what the point is so it isn't that you are repeating pain and that's the topic but if you re read you see that it's you'd with stand pain for this person. I like it overal I think you did quite well and enjoyed it very much.

Awwww! wow this is really good! one of my favorites!