Thats a really great poem :) very sad though...keep writng your good!!!

You used good rhyming techniques, but it could have flowed a little better. Very emotional and touching though.

Aww hunny. I know what it's like to lose someone so close to you. =( If you ever need to talk to someone, don't hesitate to PM me. =)

The flow was good, but could be possibly improved. I LOVED the rhymes ^_^. They were so originally thought up, and well placed. The imagery was great. I could definately feel like everyone else had at the 'party'. Well done. You're a great writer. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha