Good job, you can try using more "colorful" words. Also, check your grammer in some places.

*Keep it up

What a beautiful piece you have here. [: I absolutely adored it. Thank you for all of your comments of encouragement, they really do mean a lot to me. A job well done, my friend! Take care!

I really like this, it made me feel the passion

Like others said, despite the grammar erros and other slight issues, this was a great poem. It would be great if you could go back and edit/revise it to make it even better. Overall, its a great poem though. Please, if you have the time, read/comment on my poems as well. (I also welcome anyone whose reading this to do the same! :D) Thanx, and keep writing.

Frank

How Excellent! 5/5

Greta poem i love it . i love the words u put in it, it great
keep it up mel xxoo

I thought you poem was great. I applaud you for writing this as a lot of males would be scared to admit their feelings like this for everyone to read.4/5

Aww i really liked this poem. made me want to cry almost. it was beautiful.

Awesome =)

Great poem

This is really sweet not to be to nossy but what did you do??? And whatever you did i hope you let ya girl read this poem

OMG! IT WAS AMAZING! But, if you don't mind getting advice from a 12 y/o, it seem like some of the parapgraphs are out of sink, or they don't really match. For example, the line:

I hope someday I can ease
Your fears with just one kiss.

It seems like there should be a discribing word like Tiney, or amazing after one and before kiss, justa tip.
Also, please read my poem Living Love, I want everyones opinion

Good write, filled with so much emotion and very soulful. Well done.

Best regards,

Steve

0ohhh very heartfelt darl. i like ur way 0f writing. fr0m the heart, g0od j0b 0n this..

l0ve fr0m
d0ra

I thought this poem was very beautiful and sincere.. I completely agree with whatever you had to say on this peice.. I like how you never used any extravagant words, it made it so simple and so sweet which was way mroe romantic than something made to look or hear romantic.. it was straight from the heart and sometimes the simple words are the best said.. hehe I loved this poem.. I hope you do find that woman!!!
God Bless,
Sarah-Joy