Yea that was 4 sho 4 sho

Nice poem I really love your use of short verse. It has sort of a lover's intense feel like too many sensations rendering many words obsolete. 5/5 Keep writing and posting your poems.
-Blacksand

Omg no joke everytime i read thiis poem i cry!!! I LOVE IT 2 DEATH!!! ur tha bestest best poet eva!!!

Oh my god.... ilove this poem you are so good at writing...i love when i can imagine a poem while reading it.......you have a great talent...you even rhymed throughout the whole poem......i am so glad a read this poem:)

Thanx for the two comments. Yeah I'm new to the website. I love your poems they are so detailed. I apoligize if my two new poems are a little different but i was in a weird mood when i wrote them.

Thanks for the comments. I love this poem, it has a nice flow to it definately makes me want to read more.

Thank you for commenting on my poem...
wow! this poem is amazing, it shows such suduction without going overboard....really lets your mind fill in the words...amazing!
keep it up!

Wow... this was really good. i loved your descriptions!!!

5/5

ARP

Wow! the way it was worded and the smoothness of it was beautiful! great job

"so quickly lips part
as tongues invade
hands explore
and innocence decays"

I love that part. Very nice poem, it has a lot of power.

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Run those emotions, scribble them on thin paper.
Paint your world on this canvas.
For it is yours and no one elses.

:)

Wow...can really feel the emotions in this poem and it flows nicely! I could picture everything with what i just read and i love it....keep up the wonderful writing and i hope to see even more soon!