I love this poem! Your rhyming pattern really works well for you. I'll read a few other poems later, but I have to go, but I promise I'll read more. 5/5

Wow! I love this poem a lot.....as well as your other ones...keep it up!!!

The poem concept is good but I didn't really care much for the cussing. It fits with the poem and all, I'll give you that, and din't feel random. I think the emotion coming from these lines were welldone. It felt believable so that people most likely could releate to it. The reader should be able to pick up these vibes you're sending out which is good because a lot I rea dtoday from people didn't have anything to go by except their words.

A very strong and powerful poem. Oh, what words can do.

Excellent!

Love,
Line

Wow sounds like this girl is really depressed or somthing lol anyway i thought your poem rymed and flowed real good till it got to

Now, I'm trying to find who I am,
but with you around I can't.

the can't kinda breaks that nice little rythem thing it had goin on i donno maybe its just the way i was readin it but other than that it sounds really good gerat poem!
Mollie

Strong but you put your emotions in it ;]
keep writing!

Once again, you Poetry is great, I loved it. The Flow and The Ryhme was amazing. Keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe

Strong poetry - your emotions really come across well in this one. Great write.

Peace. [Sole]

I think that the title was really good for the poem and made it seem more real
5/5

Great work again. I really liked this poem. And can so relate to your feelings. Great job. Keep it up :)