Exellent! for some reason, my favorites new poems aren't comming up anymore. well im still the first for this one.

an exellent ands visually startleing poem. you exposed teh world to what is jsut below the surface. the flow was brillient!

havnt heard from u in a while. hope everythings ok

Ruby

EMMA!!! MY MATE!!!! LOl. This is b-e-a-utiful baby and so grotesque at the same time. oooh very classy and very very dark. shivers of anticipation for your next poem can be seen far and wide with a chance of the odd Shower with patches of sunshine. Honey, ou got it GOING ON!!!
Lol, ttyl, my friend.
xox
-Suzie j

Good job. i particularly like stanzas 1 and 5. effective use of imagery and word play. good write.

take care - hannah

Loving this poem. So contradictory in the real world, yet very relevant for the dream world. You captured it perfectly!
Great write.
Take care and God Bless,
Sarah-Joy

Gr8 work love all the detail! congrats on gettin top 5 in my contest! u were really good. anyway, keep up the gr8 work 5/5

Woah. this had even more description than before. awesomely amazing. loved ever single word. 5/5

That was very good but kinda scattered in places...the way it started was great but then it kinda got off track like the part about abortion and stuff.that threw me off...but other than tht it was very deep and sad..good job,
love ya lots,
sore

So powerful! Simply amazing. I'm in awe of your talent, really, I am. 5/5 =]

-Jenna.