Kaitlyn.
This poem, makes my jaw drop. you're SO talented... If i were a judge for a poem competition, i'd pick that as first prize.
that poem is just SO well written, probably one of my favourites of yours.

snaps for kat ;)

Realy well done for a thirteen year old I'd say. There isnt a problem in there that practice wont cure. Maybe watch your flow a bit nearer the start but apart from that - great job. Xx

This poem is intense and deep awesome i luv it ur a great poet keep up the good work 5/5

FOr a thirteen year old this poem wasn't that bad. It was dark, key element if you want to send shivers down your reader's spine, but it did repeat itself often. To avoid that try and use different words that mean the same and not many people would notice. :)

This was perfectly written in my opinion. you eaisly made the reader feel the same emotion that you felt while reading it.

This is amazing!! So strong. I've never read anything like it. Makes me shiver all over I love it!!

Thanks for the comment on my poem

now onto yours.... wow, how fantastic you are a good writer, i could follow the flow of the poem without having to stop or get stuck on words that didnt work

thank you for this amazing poem, 5/5 it was truly moving....