Wow, really great one here, I especially love this part ..
"I never fell, you let me go,
And now I'm falling still
You have reason, that I know
The lust in which to kill"

that whole "lust to kill" thing, brilliant!! great job!

Starts powerfully and the strength, the sheer emotion of the poem never lets up till the last. Brilliant. I have to say the opening lines are my favourite, really starts the whole thing with a bang. Great stuff! I really feel I understand what you're going through 5/5 x

There's something I've not told you
Something better said
Worse than what I'm going through
There's more than thoughts inside my head

^I feel that this stanza threw it off a bit. I understand the need to rhyme in this poem, but this stanza ruins the flow (well doesn't ruin, but close...hehe). I like the rest of it a lot. You are on my favorites... There is a lot of "hype or hipe" (however you spell it) around the site about you. I will continue to watch and see if you can keep writing at the level you are. KEEP IT UP!!!

I really like this poem too!! I'm really enjoying reading your work!! I really enjoy your style!! Great work!! 5/5

"friendships" needs an apostrophe.

I like the theme of this poem a lot. Especially the first two lines...

"I never fell, you dropped me,
Straight into the void"

It sets the tone quickly for an atypical way of portraying a typical poetic message. :)

I like the way the blame shifts from being the other persons fault at the ebeginning but your fault by the end, its a good way of marking the progress of the poem xx

-biscuit-

I think these comments prove that your poem is better than mine
Anon x