Whoa well done, im totally diggin this poem 5/5

Wow. I like that poem. The rhyming is great and the message is too!! I'm adding you to my faves

Wow! brilliant poem! It was just so good! No critizisem from me :D

keep writing!!

lonelynow x x x x x

p.s. look forward to your comment ;P

I liked it. But if it was me. I would have ended it in a sad way. like your last stanza.
I see me fly,
I see me dance,
I saw me die,
I saw my chance

I would have made it
I see me dance
I see me fly,
I saw my chance,
I saw me die

But that's just me. Anyway. i like it. 5/5

I love this poem. its really clever. the lines are short but they convey a lot of meaning. 5/5 and you're on my faves!

imi

For me it was TOO repetitive, reading every line and seeing I, I, I, I, kinda took the spunk out of the poem. ANd also the flow was a little off. You could tell you had a lot of good ideas when you were writing this, but It doesnt seem like you finished them out. 4/5

Not as good as your other poems. But still not the worst thing I've ever read. Keep it up.

Its good but i think it could use some more details, just to bring it to life!
Ashley 4/5

I love this poem

Its great
10/10 if i could

5/5

lana