Nice prose... Could have been a little more metaphorical or symbolic, but the poem was still passionate. Good write!

I agree with everyone else, some descriptions could bring this to life. This one line is more of a run on so maybe cut it to two different sentences:
So I take my instinct and I follow it and I gaze and I lookâ?¦ also maybe get rid ot eh site signs by editing your poem. Nice prose and a good message. It did have emotion to it.

I liked the content of the poem... but would enjoy it much more if it was structured and presented in a way you want the poem to flow. The entire poem should also be broken down into three stanzas to create the different tone... the time when you're together... the time he disappeared... and ending with the insight into your emotional state of mind. Otherwise, good write. Keep up the good work.

J. Lau

^^^ I agree with the above comment.. it needed to flow better... and i thought maybe a bit more emotion in it?.. i loved the idea of the poem thought.. great job.. keep it up

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