It's a pretty farfetched concept but with strong reality tied to it. The thought of people not being able to live in a world such as this is the fault of everyone living before us as well as ourselves. That's where the reality comes in.
I think this line was a bit too long, though. Maybe if you wanted you can take out the please:
Please can you help me die?".
Could be
can you help me die?"

I like this poem, Its sad.
much love,
XxImnotdeadxX

Great write. I love the flow of this and the emotions it portrays. It's such a sad poem yet so touching. Keep up the great work! 5/5

A very sad story. There as an intense emotion in the poem from beginning to end. A good write.

Awww! i lovvvee story poems! and this poem is so deep.. keep it up!
jessy

This is a very heart touching poem, and really sad to read but i loved it.
you've gotta a talent, good work hun.

gema xoxooxx

I get the feeling that this poem is more of a metaphor than literal...maybe that's just me, the concept seems pretty far out, but the message is very clear. I really enjoyed reading this, a poem with an obvious meaning, a purpose, is always very welcome. The rhyme worked really well and the structure helped to break the poem up nicely. Really gripped me all the way through. Great read, 5/5 x

........wow...........that was brillant!! I give it a billon!! Oh well I can only give a 5/5!! *kisses her lips* I love you hunni bunni.

Hey Cayce!! I really like this poem! It's really emotional and has a good rythmn to it! Keep up the good writing!
~Brittany~

Hey.. this is reli good.. its so sad and heartbreaking.. i liked ur rhyme and flow.. gr8 job with this poem.. i still believe the knife isnt the answer.. hope u find something to help u lok 4ward to each new day.. :)
take care
NannO

Your poem was very touching and made me think ....well done its 5* rating god bless x

HEY,
GOOD WORK, I LOVE STORIES THAT ARE TOLD IN POEMS, KEEP IT UP,
5/5
LOVE YA

Woah...very nice poem...very realistic...its hard to imagine how people could actually do that to a child

This is extremely good. but it is really sad. lol i love it though!!

This poem showed a side to poeple that most are scaried of. i respect you for not caring what people think about your poem, and you still let your soul out through this one.

keep up the great work5/5 :)

Wow!! I love it :)

Wow!! I love it :)

Such a brilliantly written poem. Was a bit sad though and i do hope that you are alright. You clearly show how you are feeling and it gave a clear discription of the girl. :)

After reading that, i thought of all the things that little girl could stand for. to me, that gave the poem a whole new spin. the last stanza was exellent

Ruby

Wow i really liked this poem!! Sad but entertaining!!! You did an amazing job!!! I love the story line!!! Amazing Work!! 5/5!!