Nice job! I really like ur poem...and i definately agree with ur look at life! Very good...Keep it up!!

A very good poem, I liked it muchly, especially the subject and the message. I'm going to make a suggestion that you absoloutely DON'T have to follow....maybe you could experiment with what would happen if you didn't try so hard to rhyme. (?) Just a thought :).

Sweet poem! good job. 5/5

Thanks guys for the nice comments, and Butterfly, i like your idea i dont take any offense to it it just kinda helps me take out my pain better when i rhyme them all out of my head....but i will give it a try.