Its really cute. i like it keep it up
dee

Jonathan, this was a good attempt for the first poem on your list. It was somewhat emotive and well expressed. Although, I am not too keen on the structure of the poem. You are not fully creating an atmosphere; rather, you are taking it a step by step approach; which in some cases is OK. For improvement: Try and build a story to the poem, that way the reader is fully concentrating on each individual thought you express.
Overall, well done and keep writing =]

Much love and God bless,
Fallen.

P.S: I think you listen to a LOT of Linkin Park. I'd try and stay away from certain lyrics. =]

It's really good I liked it alot

Eh... You don't want my thoughts on this one.

I think t his one is really nice..good job..and yes all of the things in my poem are true believe it or not

Hey jonan great poem...lol