OMG THATS AMAZING

O-M-G this is a good poem!! You write good> I look forward to reading more!! Keep it up!! Mandi:)

Fantastic peice, esspessially the end has a great message. the flow and content are good, well well composed throguhout 5/5

Hmm. I'm afraid I just don't agree with the content of the poem. Whilst it's certainly one point of view, I don't view crying as a weakness, as most people do.

I see it more as a need to release pain, emotional or otherwise... no use building it all up.

Aside from this..."small" ... disagreement, I think everything is fine and dandy as per usual with your work, including how you put the message across.

Well done.

I really couldn't get into this one as well as I did the others, because again here the rhyming seems forced and the missing punctuation. I loved the whole concept of the poem and the message that you were trying to convey. But sense you had it in the sad section I was expecting it to be sad. I really couldn't feel any of the emotion in this poem. I think it was a great beginning, but I think that it needs more work. As I said from what I have seen in some of your poems, this is not your best work. This sort of seems like a rush job. I did like it so I'm giving you a 4/5. And again I hope my comment didn't upset you, but when you entered the contest I promised to be honest with my commenting and rating. I know that you can do much better then what I have read here, and when you do I would love to be one of the first to read it. Keep up the great writing hun! I'm looking forward to reading much more.

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