Depsite the length that unravelled so well across the page....I loved it. It was so tense yet exciting throughout....I like the way the last lines of each stanza ended with a kind of echoing effect. The last line was a bit of a disappointment though...still amaaazing poem.

[lost_laureate - come find me]

Wow!! This is beautifully written!! Filled with emotion!! 5/5!! Loved it!!

Aww so sad!!!! Amazing job hun!!!

I loved it!! it brought tears to my eyes and made me think of my past...i could feel the emotion and it flowed really well..keep writing..5/5

Aww.. i loved this, it truly made me cryy! the emotion really shined through! keep it up! 5/5
jessy xox

Wow hun, that was really really good..Keep it up!!

She looks at him now
So quiet and calm
Her hand grasping his
Caressing his moist palm

^ amazing stanza.. all together i loved it great work 5/5

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*