I liked the idea of the "failed experiment" this was such an original idea to use. The poem had a strong and amiguous start however towards the end it became more of a love poem yet still tied in well with the sadness. Good write.

[lost_laureate]

I agree with Lost.

I loved it however, the flow and rythem was perfect, and it was so origanal I enjoed reading it aswell. Great Write. :)

Great flow to this peice and the content is very well written with an orihginal idea which is well used. has a good atmosphere and the mood changes thoughout very effectively.

5/5

I think that it was great. it did flow well, and, as everyone else has said, it was an orginal idea!

That was a nice title. The title alone caught my attention but I agree with lot laureate that it started tob e a love poem towards the end. Good write.

It was an originaly idea but I think maybe you should have just limited failed experiment twice probably at the start and end because you basicaly have t twice in the opening stanza alone. It's unique and some of it has a certain ring to it but the one stanza about the weather and temperature just seemed to be the same thing with two different words. Maybe that's just me. An enjoyable read none-the-less.

I love the flow of this piece . I like the whole "Failed Experiment" thing .
Nice write .
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