I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!!!!! KEEP EM COMING

I love this one 2 it is great ! ! Where do you come up with this stuff ? who is the inspriation to your poetry ??

This is amazing! makes me think a lot...also gives inspiration, I am still developing in my writing and this makes me want to grow with it even more! keep writing, you have a lot of talent! and as for criticism, I don't think you need any, it's awesome as it is!

Great Poem...I love how you wrote it...try fixing the structure a little..it will look better too...check out all my poems and rate! :D tell me what to fix plz! ~ME

Awesome poem! the rythme flows well. i like it:)

Interesting ideas again, you like to put a unique spin on things. I like the idea but i'm unsure about the chorus, and "tunnel" sounds kind of dingy and not pleasent which is where the rest of the song is heading. The phrase "come with me" i really like and i think it would be interesting in a relationship song as in 'hold my hand, everything will be alright', sort of idea. Best of luck with the band and i'll look out for you when you're famous ;)

I love your work, it reminds me of my sister, I try everyday to inspire her to a better life, she is in jail now for quite a while and I have her daughter living with me. this one brought tears to my eyes.