Very well written. amazing. congrats

Wow, this is really an amazing poem, so much of bitter realities into it potrayed in a beautiful manner, graet write
all the best and take care
5/5

Awww.. that is so sadd.. that really was full of emotion! this had a good flow and was very descriptive! the only problems or suggestions i have are::

Loneliness fill me inside
^ in this line, it should be "fills" not "fill"

and

they slip away from me like water falling through fingers
^ here, i think it would sound better if you added a "my" before "fingers" but thats just a suggestion :)

great write! 5/5

I love the title! hehe! =]