You have a unique writing style... ive never ever seen a poem like that.... i like the style a lot... but in the future i would say you should probably try to break it down into seperate lines, becaue it is kind of difficult to follow the flow of the poem when its all in one big paragraph... but aside from the setup of it... i really liked the meaning... don't be offended by that ^^^^ just take my advise into consideration... lotsaluv...

**meggie**