Ver Well Written. I loved the wording and the rythym. It's sad though knowing, alot of the soldiers whom have died. Great Write however. I enjoyed reading it.

If the person has forgotten to love at all then why do they want to go home to the person running in their minds? Other than that I have nothing else to say except that it wa spretty okay. Not like we probably will ever hear it but it was a nice read.

This was a really gr8 poem! so much emotion! congrats again on gettin top 5 in my contest. 5/5!
~*Who Cares?*~

Walking through the fields
Hearing gun shots
Ducking down low
Hoping not to get shot

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Great way to open it up. This was a good song. It had alot of meaning in it. I especially loved the chorus, Thought it was the strongest part of the song, Overall, It was awesome. Keep it up 5/5

`taleee xx

It good poem, and it captures the 'battles' of a soldier, on and off the battlefield. The only problem i found, was in the first verse, where you had shot ending a line twice.
Maybe try, "Hearing guns fire" ? Just a suggestion. Awesome stuff though.

Another fantastic song/poem I was whistling along as I read it I would love to hear some of your songs sung. Do you have them on a website or something? And i really can't think of any critisism for this one!
Aaron (remo)

Nice song can't wait to hear it on the radio ( if posible)

It was pretty short, but it was very good. I liked the ironic contrast between the thought of a loved one and the pulling out of a gun.

Awsomen Poem man.