Its straight to the point and immediately we can see whats happening here.
Which is really important to me in a poem, i dont like reading a poem and having to work out whats going on for ages.
I like this poem, its nice and it shows feelings well.
keep writing, and return the favour if you can
love Tara-Kay

I like the plot but it is rlly dull in some areas...i liked it but it coldve been carried out better...on a brighter note, i hope this situation gets better...
love ya lots,
sore

I really like it.
i mean i like the beginning a lot :D
but you have really good writing technique and i like it :)

luv:lyndsey