Wow, Bill this was a fantastic write, such imagery told in detail. It's been a while since I've read anything for you, so this poem is a great come back kick. Such a dramatic ending to this one too. A really good poem and a great story told.

Wow that was freaking great it was deep and keep me it to it the whole time kinda scare to but almost put you there keep up the amazing work 5.5

An excellent poem, great use of rhyming on the last two lines of each stnza. I really like the story line, but I think i'm gonna hav to read it again to understand it completly :)

An excellent poem, great use of rhyming on the last two lines of each stnza. I really like the story line, but I think i'm gonna hav to read it again to understand it completly :)

Breath-taking. I loved the flow of words and how easy it was to imagine your descriptions. Brilliant!