Comments : What do you do

  • 17 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    "what do you do when you have no idea
    When your dying inside and you cant figure out why"
    idea and why don't rhyme, idea ends in an 'uhhh' sound and why ends in an 'iiiii' sound.
    ~~~
    "what do you do when you start to believe
    that your whole life is one big scheme
    what do you do when your moms abusive"
    iono what scheme was supposed to rhyme with
    ~~~
    "what do you do wen you realize its time to say goodbye
    what do you do when you decide to take your own life "
    also not a rhymed couplet
    ~~~
    I wouldn't mind if none of the lines rhymed at all, but if you want to make a poem composed of rhymed couplets, then I think you should try to carry the format all the way through.

  • 17 years ago

    by gemowski

    This poem is so deep. i really enyojed readin it its filled with emotion.
    great work 5/5