Awww.. that was so saddd.. awww.. excellent write.. it made me cringe and almost cry at the same time! veryy good! 5/5

Great peice, very sad and well told throughout with a good flow and clear content.

5/5

The only thing out of place, was the 4th verse, only because it had 4 lines, and the rest had 3. It was a bit of a throw off. I think you should either add a line to the 3rd verse, or take a line away from the 4th. "Those tears hidden so far in." that line didn't seem necessary. Anyways, another awesome poem. You really write some of the best dark poetry on this site.

I loved this one. The 3rd stanza was really good. another awesome poem from you =P

I don't think theres anything in this one that needs to be changed or anything. It had a great flow. And I loved it. 5/5

`Taleee xx

That is a really good poem, but did that actually happen to some one you know????Well see ya. holla back
britt

"Gaining fears in the darking skies.
Of the untold lies the rest behind her sorry eyes."

good internal rhyme on that line.
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Suicide poem? If it is, it stated things creatively enough that it wasn't stereotypical.

Dark poems are what you are good at... stay in that range and you will do well... and nice poem... very dark... but lots of meaning and emotion!

I didnt like this one as much. but still a really good poem. the idea of the blade of destiny striking people down was a clever one

Ruby

Great Poem Once Again. Really Very Powerful. Sad.. Interesting... Different... But Powerful All The Same...

4/5

xoxo

xLauren3

Sorry.. Lol. I Meant 5/5.. ( :

Wow, i loved that so much, it was awesome. you are so talented. keep writing my friend.
xxxx

Wow... is this suppose to be about a cutter.. thats what it sounds like to me... you should stick to this type of peoms you are so good at it...

I like this poem very meaningful. Keep up the good work.

Yet Another Well Written Poem Megan.

Love MKKA!

Realy cool!!! I like it, kep it up.
Andrea

Ok wow again! It was quite the intense poem, I find. It's just the simplicity that makes it so.....so.....I don't know what! It was just great! Keep on penning master!

~Dana

Woh spooky poem. It is very deep and the language is so powerful. But sorry if I'm just being stupid but I really don't understand this line:

Of the untold lies the rest behind her sorry eyes.

Apart from that I like it, take care
- Polly 5/5

Loved the ending in this poem. Really, wow. I also liked how you refered to tears as scarlet rain drops falling from in the sky, very different and great. This was again a really good poem. The end. I loved it. Keep it up!! 5/5

Natalie``