I think that u'r poem is not that bad.acualy i think it is really good.
love Jessica
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This is a sweet simple poem... something that was genuine and true. The only thing I will comment on is "You are the who set me free" should be "You are the the who set me free", other then that, good write. Keep up the good work. Keep writing.