Brilliant poem, i loved it!

xoxoxo Haley

............I LOVE IT !

Another great poem. For someone who talks in slang, your poem have a higher class languague... that whole slang thing.. it's just a phase. In the working class world, we don't use that.
So maybe you would like to continue the language you have in this poem, instead of your slang?

Wow that was really good you can tell what you were feeling keep up the good work!!!!