Wow.. very very good! excellent write here! as with the comment above, ^ it gave me goose bumps.. loved this! was just so dark and perfect! 5/5

Very dark and well written, the vocab and composion are perfect and the flow seemless throughout. really good peice

5/5

Another amazing poem. Your writing for dark poems are great, your use of words create some really twisted images. You should write horror stories, I think you would do well. Again, awesome stuff.

Last stanza, I loved it! Only thing I found wrong in this was this line;
"My hands grasping my ears tightly, as I being shaking" It didn't sound right. But overall this was another great poem. Keep it up! 5/5

`Taleee xx

"As I sit in pain, my toes curl under, and shivers rise up my spin"
I either misunderstood what you mean, or 'spin' should be 'skin'
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That's a really scary poem.. Crap. Heh, it did a good job of conveying the terror.

Very nice poem.. i think this is one of the best i have read of yours so far.. nice work 5/5!

To me, this poem seemed to be all about the fear of the dark. if this was your intension it wored very well

just one thing

"Me eyes turn red," do you mean my?
i loved this poem

Ruby

Again, wow! seriously i love ur poems!!! well done and keep it up!!!

xxxxx

Ps. uve been added as a favourite!!:)

Truly Amazing, You Have Redeemed Your Ability To Show Great Images. lol. Very Detailed-Much More Than The Other One. This Is A Great Read. Excellent. On Of The Best Freewrites I Have Read.

5/5

xoxo

xLauren3

You're so brilliant at this poem writing thing!!! Better than me ... 5/5 ... Out of curiousity is your name in German??? Same with the title of this poem???

Another absolutely awesome poem, its reallly good and i like all your poems because they are so unique and they make me get goosebumps. lol
xxxx

Yes, yes, yes... like i said once before your poems are amazeing... i don't really read this type of poems but now i think i will well at least yours they are so great...

Hehe. Love It.

Love MKKA!

Wooooo...
An excellent piece of work
Its too good
I really reall really loved it .
Keep it up!
Take care!

Wonderfully evocative language. You have a lovely style. Keep it up.