It something I can't conceive
[I think you were meant to say"It's"]
That they might feel the same
That they may live eternal life
[Who are they? That left me a little puzzled?]
I liked the ending.. I thought it was great. Again, This was a pretty good poem. I also liked how you repeated "I wonder..." Thought that was cool! Keep it up! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Very creative poem. I think we all ask ourselves that every now and then. I like the repition of the first and last stanza, definitely made it strong. Great stuff!

Very beautiful
we really want a place like tht