Everytime a step was taken
It crumbled beneath in dust
Everything I've won and loved
Now survives on broken trust
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I loved that stanza. It was really well written. This whole poem was done amazely. I loved it. Flow and rhyming were good. And it was interesting to read. Awesome job! 5/5

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Wow.. another excellent poem, the poems on this site just seem to be getting better and better.. this was very very good.. i loved it! you used great metaphors, your rhymes were good, and there was yet again, so much emotion! the only problem i found was here ::

Who would have knew
^ here, "knew" doesn't really make sense, even though it does rhyme..

all in all, excellent write! 5/5, looking forward to reading more of these!