Wow, i thought that was powerfully sad, so emotion, so imagery that stood out, i loved it. xxxxx

Home is where the heart is,
Is written upon the wall,
The place I said my first words,
The floor on which I did first crawl.
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I loved that part. This was a good poem. And the last four lines aswell brought the poem together. Awesome job! 5/5

.x.TaLeEe.x.

Im not to sure why the low vote i thought it was really good keep up the good work 5.5

I love love the rhthem here...amazing. keep it up hun. I'm melissa by the way...aka Lissa lol.So like check me out...lol my poems and please comment thnxs. Peace.

Lissa

"Home is where the heart is,
Is written upon the wall,
The place I said my first words,
The floor on which I did first crawl.
Home is where the pain is,
They made a slight correction,
Home is where the pain is,
Sorrow, Grief and neglect ion."

Your poem was amazing. I think this is my favourite one so far. This stanza was so strong and ended the poem amazingly.

Wow, i liked this, and i found it to be true.

I thought it was amazing.
I really did.
It's similar to when I lived with my mum...
Never wanted to be home...
I loved it because I could relate..
5/5
Lovce you. xx
-Heater

"A war zone,
Run for cover; hide,
Can't leave the house,
Not safe to stay inside."
^^^
[Between you and me, my dad's a bit abusive. And seriously, though it doesn't speak strongly (there's no emotion at all to me), it still hit home a bit. Because it's so true.
I hate going home because my dad's always yelling about something. I'm always hiding in my room or behind the computer screen. So, yeah, it hit home a bit.]

"Home is where the heart is,
Is written upon the wall,"
^^^
[First you used "is" twice in a row.
But,
I'd use "it's" instead on the second line. Just a suggestion, but it flows better to me.]

I'm sorry this is so short. Normally, I say something about almost every line. But honestly, I really didn't feel the poem. I didn't get any emotion out of it, there wasn't any discripition..
The flow was pretty strong, except for in one place.
I like the idea to this, but none of the poem was strong to me.
Sorry, just being honest.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5