Nice poem
good luck

"As you go by,
My heart cries.
The flame we had years ago,
Made me cry"

the use of the word 'cry'/'cries' so close together wasn't a good thing, in my opinion. I'd change that.
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I really liked the last three stanzas, I think they flowed really well, and were filled with excellent details that really brought the poem together.

I loved it hun if this is tre just to tell u u mademe cry but i agree with shaun try not to use the same words over ok hun
xoxroxyxox

Wow...u have talent grl..keep it up so i can read more..good luck with everything
jennifer

Omgosh! that is the same way i feel about my ex girlfriend word for word its truely great

That was a very good write. Nice work. I liked it.

-Jennifer.

AWWWWW