Aw thats really sad.This is really powerful and emotional poem. good job.

I thought that the words 'way' and 'away' were used too many times in the poem.

Besides that, I thought this was a pretty touching poem about the bittersweet nature of seeing a long life end.

Rhythmically, the poem varied quite a bit, but it had its own thing going on in a sort of large way. It wasn't a really set rhythm, but more of a flowing one.

Hey i really liked this coz the same thing happened to my grandad well done it's a good poem... 5/5
-sarah-