That's a very good poem. I like it when people can make up and tell stories in the form of a poem like that.

"And as he walked through the city
he played a little ditty"

First when I read these lines, I didn't think 'ditty' was a word, and I was about to comment on it, but then I decided to look it up lol. I didn't know that was actually a word; I thought you were just using poetic license. Very clever!

Great Poem.

Ga, what a wierd poem. Any specific format you following?

Aken Sol

It's been a while since I read a story poem. It was interesting and different with out a doubt and with quite a sad story line to it. Poetically, it wasn't bad but I lost the flow in places and had to re read the line to get back into it.
I couldn't help thinking there could be more done with the fifth stanza, like add a few more lines there with more details of the story. The rhyme was good though.
Thanks for sharing.

Eerie and captivating, I like it!
You really had me intrigued and I rushed to the end and had to read it all again.
Magnificent from start to end!
Take care and keep it up~Holly

This was a good story. Based on an old folk tale or something you wrote on your own? Seems interesting.

As for the poem, I just didn't connect with the beginning and ending of the 3rd stanza. I don't think you should have started it with an 'And'. Also, I don't think the 'of' in the last line was necessary, it actually kind of throws it off.

That was about it, I liked the rest of the poem. Good stuff.

Ah yes, the poem from my contest, Excellent job, very original

It was a wonderful poem. i loved it very very very very much.. Very well written. Keep writing and Keep it up...5/5
take care

Great Poem, I enjoyed reading it- so thanx
When you have the chance, could you rate my poem “If I”
Appreciated- Truly Spoken

Vivid! I like it!

WELL I LOVED IT TOO
VERY WELL WRITTEN
YOUR A GREAT WRITER AND KEEP YOUR WORK UP

WELL DONE

LANA

Creepy! lol. I really liked this ones though.

Hehe, I like this poem. i wrote a sing song tale like this. i'll post it now!

I adore this piece, I really do.
The title is certainly eye catching, and the poem itself is wonderfully well written~
Also, thumbs up for using the word "gay" and actually doing it poetic justice, I've yet to see someone else do that. 5/5, fantastic work!

Not much else to add^...

Good choice of words. Maybe a little choppy in the beggining, but it was well written.

mandy :)