Short but so powerful! A full story told in the fine constraints of a poetry style.
Well done! Take care and keep it up~Holly

I like it when people try something different! Short but full of emotion!! It was ver good i have never read a sedoka before!!! so a new expierence for me anyways very good liked it!! 5/5!!

It was awsome. The way you packed the emotion in there was awsome.

-ifihide11

I love this kind of poem! Amazing job-The format and word choice is perfect; left me speechless for a minute--- 5/5

Keep it up-I love your work!