"So I can call you from a pay phone. a lady drops a quarter,"
I think you meant to press 'enter' somewhere in there and make a new line, because this one is by far the longest
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I thought the rhyming was very unobtrusive and well done, and the rhythm was set and strong throughout the poem (so long as that one line is actually two).

Good work.

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This is great i love it really good and thx for saying u like my poem metal noises:D ttyl bye

keenan