Very nice!!!

Wow such depth and sadness in this one. u can write in any form and style and u still write beautiful things well done keep it up 5/5

I think the poem was deep and well thought out, but maybe if you tried to think about some of the ideas abit more then it would make more sence then it would atomatically be more deeper..
But apart from that it was pretty good
=) keep up the good work
swe3t xxxx