Interestin idea for a poem! amazing. very creative. one thing u shood edit ur poem n get rid of the little ??t hings btween its. its kinda distracting. just thot id tell u. 5/5

Nice. lovved the detailing, it was amazing! congrats on gettin 2nd in my contest. 5/5

It's good, but too obvious. What I mean by that, is I think the concept would have been pulled off better if you talked mainly about the ink and paper, and didn't constantly compare to real life. The first three stanzas I was thinking about the comparison to pain and ink, so I really didn't need it pointed out to me.

Saying that, the idea what good, and I would have never thought of it myself.

"and the beauty that came,
of a seemingly fateful stain"

A very good ending there. I really liked the way you did round it up. Good work. x

Great poem!

Wow this is such a great poem, it really tells a great, original story.

"Pain helps you grow.
It can change an innocent but naive child
into a magnificent human being."

I love that bit because it is so inspirational to me... Well done it's great I don't really know what else to say! 5/5
- Polly xx

PS - I will comment the rest of the poems tomorrow!