"what you blue eyes are seeing,"
'you' should be 'your'
~~~
"what your thinking,
as your slipping off her shirt,"
"cuz you dont know how your killing me,
oh,how your killing me. "
all of those "your"s should be "you're"
~~~
I really liked the repitition at the ending, it sounded very spoken, which I take as a form of poetic personalization. I liked the details and the length of the poem, I thought it all flowed rather well.

Lovely p[oem, beautiful flow good stong wording liked the illusion to what the guys was doing with another girl. great job xxALLYxx