Aww.. i loved this! it was greatt! cant wait to hear that as a song, i bet it sounds awesome! the flow was good, and the descriptions were wonderful.. i especially loved the chorus! it was so metaphorical.. great write! 5/5

Wonderful lyrics, can't wait to hear it as a song.

This song was awesome!! What kinda music would it go to though? It doesn't really sound like it would be rock or metal.. But, that doesn't matter. Cause I listen to every style of music out there. But for your first song I thought you did really really good. I liked it alot =) 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

I love the intimacy you put into this, with the "honey" and "baby". Makes it appear to be more .. personal in way. More feeling.

I would love to hear the music

What an evil poem! You're a bad person for writing this Sean :P

Aken Sol

Wow this is defiantly really good. it flowed nicely and the lyrics them self were great! 5/5

I sure hopr that you don't actg like that. I liked the lyricss, and it sounds likle a song i would listen to. Great!

Ravyn