Comments : I will never

  • 17 years ago

    by Samantha Hollywood

    I think this poem had good content, such as wording and vocabulary. But some of your lines ran short, and some ran long, so I would suggest going through it again and making it a little more clear for the reader. I also think that on your second stanza, you should consider adding another line, maybe a rhyming one. I don`t really understand why all of your stanzas had for lines, but this one had three.
    Another thing I would keep in mind is your rhyming. As I well know some poems don`t rhyme, you seem to be confused at whether or not you want yours to rhyme. I infer this only because half of your poem rhymes well and the other half doesn`t rhyme at all.
    But overall, nice job. Keep up the good work and take my advice into consideration. 4/4.

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    I thought it was a throw off having the 2nd verse only have 3 lines, while the rest had 4. You need to add a line to it. Maybe add at the end of it "Maybe you should leave"

    Overall another good poem. Keep writing, you'll get better.
    (5)

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    I didn't really understand this.. i found that it did not really make sense.. it was sweet though..

    But, yet you have to go through the same
    ^ take out "but" it doesn't make sense..

    nice job, 4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Little Dot

    Good poem. I thought you did a really good job. Keep it up.