Hmm, this one was pretty good. I liked it. The flow and rhythm was good.

Aww.. this was good.. the flow was okay.. and your descriptions were nicely done.. there was a little emotion but nothing that straight away hit me.. i am sorry if i am being blunt on all these comments, but i am tired.. nice job though.. 4/5

I like this line:

My heart is broke and the tears will always fall

I also like the second stanza, I think it describes well, why weere you feeling the way you did.

The last stanza, was just perfect, specially the last line...it's true. Sometimes a problem can make us want to give up.

XoXo
Gaby