When writing in a poem, it's best to write out numbers using letters.

Good poem though, I really liked it :)

I think you've really expressed the inner fear of most people, that they're afraid to die alone. Unfortunately many people do. A good poem :)

I liked stanzas 1, 2, and 5. I thought the other stanzas slipped into cliches and generalities. The Save me stanza was okay thanks to its repitition, but the other stanzas really could use more specifics or details beyond the standard depression ones about cutting and crying.

This was really good!

Yet another good one."even though i don't know you,
im already afraid,
that one day ill lose you,
im afraid to die alone,"

I really liked how that went together. Well done.
JBN

Oh man I hope this isn't true...makes me so sad to read pieces like this...call out to God for times like this! He helps and will save you!
I liked how you wrote this out! Very well pieced together!
-Krissey

P.S could u read "Some kids dont play"

Wow! really emotional. i love it. 5/5

jamie aka *crimson*regret*

I thought this was a good poem, With this stanza though..

save me from the darkness,
save me from the pain,
save me from the past,
save me from myself.

I thought you could maybe spice it up a bit. Something like this..

Save me from the darkness,
Save me from all my pain.
Save me from my horrid past,
Save me from myself.

..Might make it a little more..better?

Still a great poem though. I liked it alot and could relate! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Wow, i was really affected by that. My biggest fear has always been dying alone, or that after death no one would even remember that I existed. That's why I always figured that it wasn't worth it. Anywho, it's a great poem, and I'm excited to read more of your poems! 5/5

Ravyn

This is really good.. Two lines that really stood out to me were:
I reach out for you,
I dont even know your name
I loved that. Great job on this. 5/5*

This is well writen great job! thanks for the coments!

Hey well this is my first comment for you and thanks for showing me this sit ebtw...ummwell i like this alot...because i can relate to the not dying alone...thats prolly my biggest fear

Excellent emotion. It is a horrible thing to die alone. Great job

Nicely written. I thought reaching out to a stanger in fear of dying with noone by your side was what made it all the more depressing.