So sad.. i mean really sad.. great emotion and beautifully written i hope it isn't true =(

Wow is all I can say to this, this poem was amazing sad and made me cry all at the same time.. great job you are very talented and you are going to my favorites:)

Wow, that was perfect. It was really sad and made me feel really wierd, but i thought it was written perfectly and had so much emotion, wow.
xxxxx

Wow, that poem was so sad. It had such strong emotion. It's horrible how things like this happen.

Wow, this poem was amazing and sad at the same time... i really hope that wasn't true! you did a beautiful job getting across the emotions in this poem... great job... but i know somewhere this has happened to someone and i really hope it didn't happen to u... thanks for the comments!

This was good i like the feel of the poem............5/5

Wow, you captured the child's point of view so well and to have the child ask to talk to God was just portraying that kind of innocence so well.

But I also should just let you know that you missed an r in the word her in one of the lines and I think you should have to in the sentence about what her dad had to do.

WOW!!! that was amazing, beautiful, sad, unique...it was just wow! It brought tears to my eyes..I can relate in a way! So i seriously loved it!! Keep it up! it was awesome 5/5

Oh my gosh.

I'm speechless. That was amazing, and yet so sad.

You guys write so well together. I'm stunned. Woo! All I can really say is keep writing together. Wow! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Wow, great poem..I loved it! It is very sad, I'll admit it made me feel a little depressed...Very sad story, awesome poem though, very well written! Thanks for the comment too, it was greatly appreciated. 5/5!

Wow.....im speechless. Great poem-so much emotion 5/5

Thanx for typing tht poem that explanes so much and that even goes to show how much u really love other people and if u didn't that woud have not been the poem that u typed

Oh my god.. i loved it, it was so sad i had to link back tears from my eyes.. that was absolutely fantastic...

Wow... im speechless it was so good but also really sad! it flowed really nicely and was really well written. 5/5

Beatifuly written poem but very sad indeed i liked it.

I loved this poem. You did a wonderful job. I was very sad and thats what poetry is about. Keep up the good work.

-ifihide11

Wow... I am speachless.. this is just... I do not own words to describe... I bow down for you..

Hey , this is such a sad poem!
it flows and rhymes so well. this actully happened here a few years ago, to a family friend. it left her child orphened.
love and thanks
mel

This is very touching..you have madd talent

I like the poem, but I do have one problem with it. In parts of the poem, you refer to the little girl as the narrator, as in "my mother died that night" or whatever it was. Then, in the next stanza it's someone else talking "Daddy had hit them both that night,
But she was the one who was alive
No matter how much she cried over mother,
Her tears couldn't bring her back to life".
It should be written using us and I and not them and she. Other than that, it's great :)