Aww that is SO beautiful. I LOVE the imagery and the descriptions.. this poem has just completely captured my heart. Especially the part about the eagle. This is now one of my new favorite poems =)
Great job. Keep it up and take care.
Sarah-Joy

Aww.. that is so sad and is definitely something that I can relate to. My absolute favorite stanza was:
Why did it have to be this way,
Why did you have to leave,
Why did you have to love her,
More than you ever loved me.
That one hit me hard. But you did a great job on describing everything and the flow and rhythm was really good. I loved it! 5/5**

I can relate so much. This was a really pretty poem, and I liked it very much. It had beautiful descriptions that kept my mind in the poem and I didn't lose hope for it once.

WoOt!
Ravyn

I really loved that poem, it was sad but well written and the imagery was there to see, it was really good.
thanks for the comment on my poem
love Tara-Kay

Very sad poem, But I could really understand it and relate to it.

I thought you did pretty good on it. I can't see anything that should be changed. I liked it alot. Keep up the great work! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

I would like to say that was AMAZING...I was totally wraped up from the first moment...I was so true too...Sometimes you do have to let go...Nice job agian...
Emma 5/5

It's a good poem with strong emotion and a touch of sadness... Enjoyed reading it.

This is AMAZING!! you showed the emotion so well i could totally relate! great job

"I have realized you aren't comming back,"
['coming] You had too many 'm's.

Really good poem, I understand what it's like to be so high up, and then fall to the depths of the earth. Well at least, that is what I got from this poem.

Sitting on this mountaintop,
Thinking about our departure,
Inviting the moon to look down,
And gaze upon all of nature.

*beautiful stanza*

The silent wind dances with my hair,
As a lonely tear stains my cheek,
The night sky is filled with stars,
And the water flows rapidly in the creek.

*Take the AND away...takes away from the mood your creating*

Why did it have to be this way,
Why did you have to leave,
Why did you have to love her,
More than you ever loved me.

*Why is a question and should grammatically have a ? to follow*

I look at the beauty around me,
And wish you were here to share it,
To lay on the heavenly grass,
And listen to the creatures in silence.

*ahhhh so many and's*

An eagle soars above me in the sky,
Its life and secrets a mystery,
Flying so proud with nothing to stop it,
It will remain forever free.

*another great stanza*

I have realized you aren't comming back,
You have left my life foever,
Even though I will never forget you,
Maybe this is for the better.

*coming, forever - watch your spelling*

Hey Cayce! I really liked how you turned a sad poem into beautiful imagery...you don't see that to often and I quite enjoyed this! I like your style of writing! Your very gifted! 5/5
-Krissey

P,S could you read "two voices unheard"

Beautiful. a trully exquisite poem, with fantasic language. the emotion in the poem was stronge and i enjoyed reading it. well done indeed

Ruby

I liked the ending and the other stanzas were quite good, but there was soemthing missing, i'm not sure what it was, maybe it was a personal connection. but it's not about how it speaks to me, it's about how it speaks to you : ) so well done, a truly beautiful poem.

I loved the imagery in this poem. However, the rhyme seemed off to me. It seemed forced and didn't really flow well. You do have aa knack for imagery. Try maybe to either not rhyme at all or have it flow better. Keep writing!

Awesome poem it flowed great, very different and unique to.a true original!

Great job!

-Please r/r/c rose colored glasses
and love!

Love, such a complicated thing!
wonderful poem! loved it!

Good job, flows nicely and i can see the emotion you put into it. i really enjoyed it.
Driver

Amazing, the way you put your words and the way you put the feeligns... its soo good... keep it up!

Aw this is sad.... i like the whole idea about the mountaintop thing.. i dont know why but i love it.

good work on this one.

5/5

~Michelle~