Gee this is good. i read it and was like whoa. had to read it a few times. the storyline in it was beautifully panned out. the ending was not as dramatic. but anyways i loved another of your poems!

5/5 David

Wow. That was sad, yet beautiful.
The message was wonderful, it's true we need to go after what we want before it's too late.
Nice storyline & overall, great job. =]
Keep it up! 5/5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

This type of "story" is reallly great! it's so true how some people are with the wrong person. the person that won't treat them the way everyone should be treated. the one taht might not love you.
i think this happens to alot of people...and sometimes it is too late...
you portray the situation very well!!!

This is so touching and thought provoking. i like the way you have layed it out, as it makes it more unique and interesting. a great write! keep it up!xXx

Very thoughtful its almost more a short story than a poem though