Comments : I'll Take This Knife

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    "I'll take this knife, and end my strife
    I'll take this knife, and end my life "
    [Great lines, but you don't want to use to word 'end' twice. It makes it weak. Try using 'lose' my strife instead?]

    Up to you. Good stuff though. I liked the rhymes and flow.