Other than certain parts the flow was good and i got the message and point clearly...great job i liked it..i can relate,
love ya lots,
sore

Thanks for the comment.
I apreciate it.
I love this poem
you are really good at writing
keep it up

That soo good! yet soo sad again!
you got the talent and keep it up!

Unfortunately we all make mistakes that can change our entire lives and way of thinking. Another poem I love, keep up the good work because you have so much talent. 5/5

Although we are always hunted by our mistakes in the past, we should never let them cover The new ways of tomorrow..

5/5

This was another great poem by you. 5/5 like always

Aww this is really sad, but its really good too =]. i love this. wonderful job you did writing this. keep it up. 5/5

Wow I love the whole poem the rhythm was terific and awesome and I love this lines alot

Every smile and every laugh
Gets harder and harder to fake
Every moment of every day
Her mind is taunted by the mistake
I love how you put it together greatly written good job

XD

Geneross

Again, your rhymes were very good. The flow in this one was a bit broken but you managed to pull it through to the end. A very sad poem with a lot of emotion. Suicide is something that I'm sure, most people have been confronted with. Whether it be first hand knowing someone, or contemplating it on their own. Well written topic.

Her mind is taunted by the mistake

[I think you might have meant "haunted" ..I could be wrong.]

Very sad poem though. I've been in this situation so I can relate alot. I hope this wasn't based on anything about you..

Your flow and rhyming were great. & I really liked how much effort you've put into the emotions. You described them great. Keep it up.

Natalie``

"Her mind is taunted by the mistake"

~ For some odd reason, I don't feel that "the" fits correctly with that line... maybe "her" or something would flow a bit better.

Other than that, the poem was quite flawless. I really felt the emotion put into this poem. You have a great talent with words. Keep writing. You have great potential. 4.7/5

~BJ~

I think the flow wasn't perfect but good, it made sense and i overall enjoyed the poem.
it was sad and the emotions were visable.
keep writing
love Tara-Kay
xxxx

8th poem! =) but personally its not because of the forum just that i really love your work! the 4 line thing is kinda what i prefer also =) i love it! 5/5!