Amazing. just amazing. your rhyming was perfect, the flow was perfect, the story...

i had tears in my eyes, not at the poem, but at the note at the end. to read the poem is one thing. to find it it true gives each word a new meaning compleatly.

i thought this poem was exwisite in its writing, and haunting in its meaning.

Ruby

:O o my god and i thought my dad was bad thats just sick
but good imagery

Very suspenseful poem. Is your dad still doing that? Excellent rhymes and flow. Keep it up

Wow.. That made me cry. I'm sorry that you had to go through this. I know my dad used to do something similar (not quite as extreme) to my brothers, but he's changed now so I never had to experience it myself. You showed alot of emotions in this, and you described everything very well. Once again, I'm sorry that you had to go through this. Take care :) 5/5

Beautiful poem...It is absolutely breathtaking---I love the rhyme and it definately didnt feel forced at all--It really added to the flow of the poem. The flow was unbelievably good-there were no parts in the poem where it felt disjointed. You expressed your emotions very well and in a very deep powerful way and it felt like I was really experiencing being there. The imagery in it is amazing! Im sorry that you ever had to go through this-no one should have to, I hate abuse! This poem is no doubt a 5/5.